The last part of the book is the only one written by Nick, and it's dealing mainly with events that had already been resolved. Did this section drop from the lack of tension? Did you think it still had something to say? Were you frustrated by it? Why would only that segment be narrated by Nick, and why wouldn't his narrative have been included earlier in the book, when we didn't know what was happening on the road to Babylon?
Posted by punahougirl84 (Member # 1731) on :
This was sort of a way to tie up loose ends, but Jones is not the only author to do this. If she had done it earlier, it would have meant possibly more chapters with new 1st Person POVs since Jones can't use Maree due to her state at the time. The big trouble I had was I already had figured out Nick wanted to be a Magid, and that wasn't such a surprise. It did move forward with the revelation of the Upper Room, which was appropriate. Telling it from Nick's perspective did mean Jones could finish explaining things. In the end, I was fine with it, though it did seem to drag because even though she 'shows' the action on the road to Babylon (whatever it was), it is 'telling' too.
Posted by teddyrux (Member # 1595) on :
I could have done without it. It was good information, but it was too long. If the description of the trip to Babylon was shorter, I could have put up with it. I just felt that it was excessive.
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Posted by rickfisher (Member # 1214) on :
I agree that there was a problem with this, and one that could have been easily fixed. If the long middle section of Nick's part had been placed in chronological order, it wouldn't have spoiled any surprises (or none that were crucial, anyway) and would have held my interest a lot better. Of course, it could have been a bit shorter, anyway.
The surrounding sections I think were fine as they were. They wouldn't have been too long if the middle section had been placed elsewhere.