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This just proves how much quality work lies unnoticed in the great literary slushpiles. That Weston seems like quite the leader, he really has a handle on his men.
quote: Instinctively, without thinking about it, he grabbed the woman and hugged her and then gave her breasts a couple of playful pinches. "Commander please," she said as she blushed and began yodeling.
I'm going home to talk to my wife about the yodeling stuff. I think I've been missing out on something.
quote:"Corporeal, we've got to do our best to keep this from the public." "I know sir, but its already too late." What do you mean, the general inquired? "While you were gone I let a curious private in on the secret." "We've got to stop him." By now he's long gone. Sorry sir." "Oh no."
quote: He was tall, thin and bony, like a cadaver trying to remember something, what was it? oh yes! I'm dead, I shouldn't be walking around like this.
quote: The two naked bodies, which were lying beneath the satin sheets, were no longer the people whom everyone, who was anyone, knew whenever reality was in existance.
Boy, does that sum up my sex life!
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quote: He was tall, thin and bony, like a cadaver trying to remember something, what was it? oh yes! I'm dead, I shouldn't be walking around like this.
Let's give a little bit of credit. This is a funny joke that works. From my POV, the writer shot and scored. Say what you want about the rest of the piece, but this description is funny. Funny is hard to do, and I haven't seen any excerpt from a hatracker that's actually made me laugh, on this side or the "Writer's Workshop" side. An occasional post, but never a set joke pulled off with this kind of aplomb.
CT made a comment about a woodchiper, and TomD is clever, and mothertree places her finger on the funny everynow and then, but for the most part, these two lines are as good as anything I've read here, and a lot better than most.