quote: What if I'm kidnapped by pirates from Schnogg? What if I'm chased by Fang-fanny the dog? What if my school is an alien lander, Or I'm dared to eat worms by Jason Morander? What if I'm lost while camping out back, And a hungry old troll stuffs me into a sack? What if my very best friend in the world Leaves me all alone, to play tea with the girls?
Will you chase down the pirates and cage up the dog? Will you fight off invaders and dare Jason with frogs? Will you come hunting for us, both the troll and for me, And summon your magic to help me go free?
I'll be your very best friend on the earth, And I'll find you wherever, from Fairbanks to Perth. I'll be there to hold you, and make it all rightï¿½ And in the dark darkness, I'll turn on the light. There's no troll can keep you away from my love, No alien starship can drag you above Where my strength cannot reach you; it cannot be done. For I am your Daddy and you are my son.
This is just an excerpt from a longer work, entitled 'Sing Me a Song of Canterby Downs.'
[ June 10, 2004, 11:19 AM: Message edited by: Scott R ]
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Very cute! I like the trolls and aliens; these are things that my own son would enjoy if this were read aloud to him. The only suggestion I have is to change the line about "tea with the girls" to "tea party with girls." I think it flows better and is more clear that way. Of course, I don't know what context this excerpt fits into, so perhaps it's better the way you wrote it. I would love to read more!
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