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anyone care to read over about five pages (1600 words) from the intro I posted earlier (TOPIC: "stupid first lines" and "first lines second try") Its a rought first draft, just looking for comments on whether or not it seems to flow well and if it makes any sense to a reader who doesnt already have the rest of the story in his/her head.
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I liked it too - send it my way - I can handle about that length. WP if you have it, if not I'll manage. Good timing, as I just finished a rewrite myself!
Edit: To anyone who's interested, I finished up the first chapter now so it is about double the length now for anyone who cares to read it and yell at me
[This message has been edited by kinglear (edited March 18, 2004).]
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