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mikemunsil
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If anyone would care to comment, I would be glad to learn from you. Here are a few lines.

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What are you looking at?
The trees.
What?
The trees. Look at them. They rise.
C’mon. Let’s go.
No. Look at them, look at the trees.
Mike! I have! All my life! They’re just trees.
No they’re not. Look at them. They rise.

[edited to reduce the line count, thanks Survivor!]

[This message has been edited by mikemunsil (edited October 07, 2004).]

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djvdakota
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You know I love your stuff. You don't even have to ask. Just send it.
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Warbric
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You've got my curiosity up. Please send it. I'll check it out when I get home from work and finish tearing into my computer.
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Christine
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Weird. Different. If it goes on like this for too much longer I might be annoyed but for the moment I'd love to have a look!
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mikemunsil
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It's only 155 words, Christine. Less than 1 page, and I'd love to have your impressions. D)

[This message has been edited by mikemunsil (edited October 06, 2004).]

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Jeraliey
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I'd like to see it.
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Survivor
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If it's only a 155 words, you've spent too many on this opening.

But I like it anyway. It does move, as one might say (if one was I, and speaking of this opening ). I'd certainly be willing to read the whole thing.

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MaryRobinette
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Me too.
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Still need readers, mike? I'd like to read this.
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