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TLBailey
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[This message has been edited by Kathleen Dalton Woodbury (edited March 24, 2009).]

[This message has been edited by TLBailey (edited March 29, 2009).]

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bandgeek9723
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Well, this kinda makes it hard to critique doesn't it? I'll give it a try anyways.

You need to flesh it out a little more, I think. Yeah, in fact, putting in some words in general would improve this piece by leaps and bounds.

I like the minimalism though, very bold.

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