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Bansuki
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First I'll introduce myself: I was named °ø ¸¸»õ by my parents (they were Joseon nationalists). It translates to ¡°ten thousand years¡± in the ancient language of Joseon (or Korea)...
And that [my ship and its AI] is the body and mind of my mission. I am its soul. But its spirit is a set of goals that I wrote up and had stored as the first piece of permanent data on the ship, and they are:
1.To document the spread of mankind throughout the galaxy.
2.To find out each planet's memory of Earth.
3.To understand the history and nature of man.
4.To find successful criteria to identify the best planet.
5.To discover if there is intelligent life other than man and his creation.
6.To make all of this knowledge available to all humans.
7.To find a home.
...I have committed them to memory, and I will carry out this task until I perish in the attempt...
A monument destroyed 1480 years ago says that the colony was founded exactly a thousand years (to a day) before the mighty stone's dedication. The stone itself claimed a current date of... anywhere from 4900 to 4909. This is assuming that my sources on Saturn were correct in estimating the first colonizations in the late third millennium when using the ancient Julian calendar (which was used during the time of the first colonizations). But scientific tests done on the monument's fragments conclude that it cannot be old enough. It must either be a fake or a copy of an original.

I have over 26,000 words already written - it's an epic story of a future Marco Polo discovering the wide spectrum of human possibility and coming to understand man's nature and the nature of history. It's an SF vehicle for my personal philosophies. Here's the link to the home page for it where you can find the latest version of the story (I update it frequently): http://home.uchicago.edu/~bansuki

[This message has been edited by Bansuki (edited December 29, 2003).]

[This message has been edited by Bansuki (edited December 29, 2003).]


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Phanto
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Welcome to the forums!

I assume you aren't planning on selling this story, because you, well, can't after posting it on the internet.

I'll look at the story shortly, when I have time.


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I don't imagine that most of the readers of this forum have Korean installed in their browsers (and I don't usually use it because I hate what it does to all the English text). So you should probably use phonetic spelling (and I don't mean the romanization, I can't read romanized korean and neither can anyone else--I mean foe-ne-tick). I'm just guessing, but Goeng Maan-Sae (Say, whatever) will probably look a lot better than °ø ¸¸»õ to most English language readers (and that's an educated guess). Likewise, Joseon looks like a three syllable word to English readers...and worse, doesn't look like a Korean word. I don't really speak Korean anymore. But would anyone really name their kid ¸¸»õ? Sounds like a too proud name, a harbinger of chaos

Anyway, your call.

I might send you more comments, but they won't be about Han-gul, since I've pretty much exhausted my knowledge already.


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