Hatrack River Writers Workshop   
my profile login | search | faq | forum home

  next oldest topic   next newest topic
» Hatrack River Writers Workshop » Forums » Fragments and Feedback for Short Works » Pity the Toys - The First Line entry

   
Author Topic: Pity the Toys - The First Line entry
MaryRobinette
Member
Member # 1680

 - posted      Profile for MaryRobinette   Email MaryRobinette         Edit/Delete Post 
I was going to sit this one out, but I was stuck on an airplane (again) and behold. I've got an entry for The First Line It's short, 776 words.

----

Life would be so much easier if I were a cartoon character. I gotta tell you, life sucks as a puppet. I mean, cartoon characters got it easy. They don't have to deal with five-fingered monsters crawling up their ass or kids pulling their eyes out.

I know what sort of package deals cartoons get cut. I was talking with old Scoobster the other day and, once you get past the doggy speak, he's pretty clear. Cartoons get television shows, feature films...that means a lot of audience, and a lot of audience means energy. Now, I ask you, when was the last time you saw a puppet in a feature film? Besides the Muppets™ (registered trademark, my ass) who've got a lockdown on the whole industry.


Posts: 2022 | Registered: Jul 2003  | Report this post to a Moderator
yanos
Member
Member # 1831

 - posted      Profile for yanos   Email yanos         Edit/Delete Post 
This could be amusing... me'll read You and your puppets.
Posts: 575 | Registered: Dec 2003  | Report this post to a Moderator
HSO
Member
Member # 2056

 - posted      Profile for HSO   Email HSO         Edit/Delete Post 
I would very much like to read it as well.

To answer your character's question: There was that new movie by the makers of South Park -- don't know the name, haven't seen it -- and it was all puppets. Yoda, was originally a puppet before he was computerized. Oh, and let's not forget Chucky. (All right, I'll stop messin' w/ ya.)

[This message has been edited by HSO (edited January 19, 2005).]


Posts: 1520 | Registered: Jun 2004  | Report this post to a Moderator
mikemunsil
Member
Member # 2109

 - posted      Profile for mikemunsil   Email mikemunsil         Edit/Delete Post 
I'd like to read as well.
Posts: 2710 | Registered: Jul 2004  | Report this post to a Moderator
djvdakota
Member
Member # 2002

 - posted      Profile for djvdakota   Email djvdakota         Edit/Delete Post 
May I?
Posts: 1672 | Registered: Apr 2004  | Report this post to a Moderator
GZ
Member
Member # 1374

 - posted      Profile for GZ   Email GZ         Edit/Delete Post 
I'd be happy to take a look.
Posts: 652 | Registered: Feb 2002  | Report this post to a Moderator
Lord Darkstorm
Member
Member # 1610

 - posted      Profile for Lord Darkstorm   Email Lord Darkstorm         Edit/Delete Post 
Nice, I'll have a look if you want.
Posts: 807 | Registered: Mar 2003  | Report this post to a Moderator
MaryRobinette
Member
Member # 1680

 - posted      Profile for MaryRobinette   Email MaryRobinette         Edit/Delete Post 
Thanks, I've sent it on its way.

The title is wrong, but I'm having trouble coming up with a good one. Here are the options I've tried:
Pity the Toys
Registered Trademark, My Ass
Every Block of Wood

Please help me come up with something that's good.


Posts: 2022 | Registered: Jul 2003  | Report this post to a Moderator
maverick
Member
Member # 2302

 - posted      Profile for maverick   Email maverick         Edit/Delete Post 
How about Puppet Envy. After all the puppet is envious of the life of a cartoon character.

[This message has been edited by maverick (edited January 19, 2005).]


Posts: 29 | Registered: Jan 2005  | Report this post to a Moderator
Survivor
Member
Member # 213

 - posted      Profile for Survivor   Email Survivor         Edit/Delete Post 
I'd like to read it. All you Puppets is probably the wrong title...I'll leave my efforts for later.
Posts: 8322 | Registered: Aug 1999  | Report this post to a Moderator
rickfisher
Member
Member # 1214

 - posted      Profile for rickfisher   Email rickfisher         Edit/Delete Post 
My dear Mrs. Kowal,

Me, please.

Sincerely,
Mr. Fisher


Posts: 932 | Registered: Jul 2001  | Report this post to a Moderator
TruHero
Member
Member # 1766

 - posted      Profile for TruHero   Email TruHero         Edit/Delete Post 
Team America. That is the Southpark puppet movie from last summer. It was amusing.

[This message has been edited by TruHero (edited January 20, 2005).]


Posts: 471 | Registered: Sep 2003  | Report this post to a Moderator
MaryRobinette
Member
Member # 1680

 - posted      Profile for MaryRobinette   Email MaryRobinette         Edit/Delete Post 
I haven't been able to bring myself to see Team America because the manipulation in the trailers is soooooo bad. But that's not related to the story.

Survivor and Mr. Fisher, the story is on its way. Thanks!

[This message has been edited by MaryRobinette (edited January 20, 2005).]


Posts: 2022 | Registered: Jul 2003  | Report this post to a Moderator
HSO
Member
Member # 2056

 - posted      Profile for HSO   Email HSO         Edit/Delete Post 
Hmm... title ideas... hmmm...

How about:

"Boy's Dream"

(since the puppet is the "Boy" in the Velveteen Rabbit, if I recall correctly).

Or maybe "A Boy's Dream" would be better. I dunno...

Not sure I like either of those, actually...


Posts: 1520 | Registered: Jun 2004  | Report this post to a Moderator
HuntGod
Member
Member # 2259

 - posted      Profile for HuntGod           Edit/Delete Post 
Well that is definately better than my disgruntled cartoon idea.

Kudos!

Title ideas...

No Strings Attached

A Hand in my Colon

Drawing a Blanc

Sorry that's the best I could come up with. Would love something that worked in Frank Oz's name, maybe tying it in with The Wizard of Oz.


Posts: 552 | Registered: Dec 2004  | Report this post to a Moderator
Jefficus
Member
Member # 272

 - posted      Profile for Jefficus   Email Jefficus         Edit/Delete Post 
I kind of like Pinoccio's Step-Children or maybe The Third Dimension Is One Too Many

Jefficus

*Edited to fix a typo.

[This message has been edited by Jefficus (edited January 21, 2005).]


Posts: 43 | Registered: Oct 1999  | Report this post to a Moderator
   

   Close Topic   Feature Topic   Move Topic   Delete Topic next oldest topic   next newest topic
 - Printer-friendly view of this topic
Hop To:


Contact Us | Hatrack River Home Page

Copyright © 2008 Hatrack River Enterprises Inc. All rights reserved.
Reproduction in whole or in part without permission is prohibited.


Powered by Infopop Corporation
UBB.classic™ 6.7.2