I was looking at another post on short stories and came across a problem. When doing speech the following is permissible:
"Why did I do that?" he asked himself.
But if you turn that into thoughts you run into the problem of the question mark, don't you?
e.g.
Why did I do that?, he thought.
The above is wrong, so how do you do it? Do you have to seperate them? Can you drop the question mark? You don't if it's speech.
I am sure it's really simple, so if someone could tell me I would be grateful. There have been a few stories where I have wanted to tag a thought question, for pacing reasons etc. but didn't know how to do it. Consequently, I have had to work around it.
[This message has been edited by skadder (edited November 15, 2007).]
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Well if your doing third limited Pov it's not necessary really to include the "he thought" or even italicize. Or the Italics usually say the "He thought" for you. Or "He thought." is a full sentence so just don't worry about it. Or invert them, which is probably your best option if you insist on the "he thought". Ex. "He thought why did I do that?"
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They're right, lost the tag it's redundant.
In fact I learned this strategy from Card, though I rarely employ it: [something like this] Ender brushed the back of his neck, the monitor was gone. Now I'm just like everybody else, just like Peter. No, not like Peter...
The push into first person is sort of an internal monologue and it is perfectly clear who is giving the thoughts, and it isn't the narrator, so the glide from third to first and back is seamless and natural, when done properly.
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I used to put 'he thought' and I used to italicise thoughts, now, I put the thoughts in a seperate paragraph and carry on. It's easy to know what is thought and what isn't:
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I do it a lot. I never bother with italics and have never had an editor complain. In limited 3rd, it seems natural to at times express your characters thoughts. I don't even bother with putting them in separate paragraphs.
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Well, in a print manuscript, the traditional way to indicate italics is to underline, because it's hard to tell just from looking at italics and regular. A heavy amount of either means (or used to mean) a lot of work for the typesetters...
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No he doesn't. He doesn't break for a new paragraph, he doesn't stuff in a tag, and he doesn't put it in quotes. He just says it, and it is simple and clear.
Alex walked down the road with his head down, kicking the soccerball ahead every few steps. I'll never be as good as Joe. And that's not fair, Joe's such a jerk. A passing car splashed water on him from the gutter. Alex shook himself off and punted the ball into the street.
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Well you see in third limited the line between the narrator and the POV character is supposed to be fuzzy, so to tighten that line with italics defeats the purpose.
quote:Well, in a print manuscript, the traditional way to indicate italics is to underline, because it's hard to tell just from looking at italics and regular. A heavy amount of either means (or used to mean) a lot of work for the typesetters...
I just want to add amen to that. (I've done some typesetting recently and the manuscripts had italics on them, and I'm quite sure that I missed some.)
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