While the following excerpt from the beginning of the first chapter is in third person POV, most of the story is written in the first person POV. I'm trying to decide if the story would be better when told from some other POV than first person?Access Memory: Jay: River Sphere
He ran through the access tunnel in his silver, metallic wolf form, chasing the night-black cheetah-like hounds, which like himself searched for the newly collected bio, which had been delivered to one of twenty intake points by one of the Collectors. He picked up speed, caught up with the rearmost of the hounds, and dispatched it with a quick tearing bite to the throat. He killed the second hound even as the body of the first fell apart in a shower of black dust...
Please send an e-mail to the address in my profile if you are interested in having a look at the first chapter.
Sorry, forgot to say how long it is. 5,000 words -give or take a few.
[This message has been edited by nellievrolyk (edited April 09, 2003).]
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Sounds like the story, with a little polishing, could be a good one!
