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Rounds One, Two, Three, Four, Five, Six, Seven, Eight, Nine, Ten, Eleven, Twelve, Thirteen, Fourteen, Fifteen, Sixteen, and Seventeen, Eighteen, and Nineteen, Twenty, Twenty-one, Twenty-two, Twenty-three, Twenty-four, Twenty-five, Twenty-six, Twenty-seven, Twenty-eight, and Twenty-nine.

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I don’t know how he even heard the sound. But he must have, because he stopped the car and got out to listen. I couldn’t hear anything but the sputter of the engine.

“I think it’s a kitten,” he said climbing down into the drainage ditch. “It’s right around here somewhere.”

He reached his hand into the pipe that ran under the road and pulled out what looked to me in the car like the soggy remains of a cornbread muffin. Until it moved. I had never seen a kitten that small away from its mother. He handed it to me through the window and told me to keep it warm until we got home.


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The guess from list:

advice for robots . . . . . Human. . . . . . . . . .. . Pat
ae . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .Icarus. . . . . . . . . . .. . Pixie
amira tharani . . . . . . . . .IndexCard . . . . . . . . porcelain girl
Amka . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .Irami. . . . . . . . . . . . .. pooka
Annie . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .JaneX . . . . . . . . . . . . rivka
Avadaru. . . . . . . . . . . . . jeniwren. . . . . . . . .. . Ryuko
Belle. . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . Jon Boy. . . . . . . . . . . sarcastic muppet
Bob_Scopatz . . . . . . . . Kama. . . . . . . . . . . . saxon75
Caleb Varns . . . . . . . . . KarlEd . . . . . . . . . . . ScottR
CalvinMaker . . . . . . . . . katharina. . . . . . . .. . Shlomo
Celia60 . . . . . . . . . . . . . Kayla . . . . . .. . . . . . . Slash the Bezerker
Christy . . . . . . . . . . . . . . kwsni . . . . . . . . . .. . . solo
Dan_raven . . . . . . . .. . . Leonide . . . . . . . . . . sndrake
Dante . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Leto II . . . . . . . . . . . . Strider
dkw . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . littlemissattitude. . . . T_Smith
Dragon . . . . . . . .. . . . . . :Locke . . . . . . . . . . .. Tammy
^eleKtron . . . . . . . . . .. . . ludosti. . . . . . . . . . .. Teshi
enjeeo . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . Maethoriell . . . . . . . The Tick
Ethics Gradient . . . . . . . mackillian. . . . . . . . Tresopax
Feyd Baron . .. . . . . . . . . Mama Squirrel . . . . Troubadour
Flyby . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Morbo.. . . . . . . . . . . TomDavidson
Filleted. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Nick . . . . . . . . . . . . twinky
Fugu13. . . . . . . . . . .. . . . Noemon. . . . . . . . . . Unmaker
Geoffrey Card . . . . . . . . Ophelia. . . . . . . . . . . Vána
Hobbes . . . . . . . . . . .. . . Papa Moose . .. . . . . zgator

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The score:

Rivka: 76 ˝
Saxon75: 63
Sarcasticmuppet: 59 ˝
Eslaine: 55 ˝
Jeniwren: 40
Noemon: 40 ˝
Christy: 37
Celia: 38
Ophelia: 29
Advice for Robots: 27
Deirdre: 25
Morbo: 20 ˝
Ryuko: 20
Teshi: 20
Caleb: 16
Belle: 16
Mackillian: 15˝
Irami: 15
Sopwith: 15
Annie: 13
Dan Raven 11 ˝
Tom Davidson: 10 ˝
Fugu: 10
Twinky: 10
Scott R: 10
Leonide: 8
Nick: 8
T Smith: 7 ˝
Hobbes: 7
BannaOJ: 6
Katharina: 6
Jon Boy: 5
Human 4˝
esl: 4 ˝
Ethics Gradient: 4 ˝
Enjeeo: 4 ˝
Fitz: 3
Brinestone: 3
Beren One Hand: 2
Jaiden: 2
Blacwolve: 2
GreNME: 2
Icarus: 2
Emperor Palpatine: 2
Tristan: 2
ClaudiaTherese: 2
Locke: 2
ludosti: 2
Kayla 1˝
Papa Moose: 1
Filetted: 1
Kwsni: 1
Pooka: ˝
Punchdrunk: ˝

Five points for a correct guess with either rationale for the guess or a critique of the story
Two points for any guess with a critique
One point for any guess with a rationale
An icy stare for a guess with neither critique nor rationale

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The first sentence in the third paragraph is grammatically poor. Break it up a bit, or reword it.

My guess: Locke

My reason, well, because I had too.

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I think I'd like more of a clip to get the feel of the story. If this is the beginning, I think it needs some more of a set-up or a follow up on where when and who.

Really this is just a teaser.

Maethoriell?

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No and no.
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This sounds like a male voice to me. I like the passage, even with the awkwardness of the first two sentences. It could be smoother, but since we don't really have enough text to tell if the voice has an awkward way of speaking, it's possible that the sentences make sense in the context.

I especially like the cornbread muffin description. Very cute. Cute, but still I think this is a male voice.

Is it Unmaker/David Bowles?

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No.
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It is barely a taste, as Christy said. I'd like to see more. [Smile]

The word "he" is used 6 times in this short excerpt. It should be replaced with the character's name (if known) some of those times. Or with a description -- "my husband," "the stranger" or whatever is appropriate.

Random guess: Morbo

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the 'he' repetition doesn't stand out to me as much as the 2 'but's in the first paragraph. it is cute.

pixie?

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There were some problems with the prose, but I think the description was great. I'd never have thought to describe a wet kitten as looking like "the soggy remains of a cornbread muffin." If whoever this is works on the mechanics a bit, he or she could become a very good writer.

Almost at random: Shlomo.

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The author seems adept at setting the stage-- in a few moments, we know where we are, and are swooped into the story. Nice work, though I have to complain it IS a bit brief, which makes me bitter.

And this piece screams female writer. Kitty in the rain? Why not just throw a vial of estrogen in our noses?

anne kate.

Think I'll nuke Texas, now. Hey, do I get extra points for that, dkw?

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Well, isn't that just a marshmallow soaked in honey then? "soggy remains of a cornbread muffin"?

Scott however is doing pretty well here. I have to give him points for nuking Texas as well.

But for entertainment value, I'll guess Pat.

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No points for the use of nuclear weapons.

No correct guesses, either.

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quote:
“I think it’s a kitten,” he said climbing down into the drainage ditch.
I might tweak that to
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“I think it’s a kitten,” he said, as he climbed down into the drainage ditch.
I guess porce.
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Okay. . .

How exactly did the guy know there was a kitten in a drain pipe? This could use some explanation.

Kama

[ November 13, 2003, 06:34 AM: Message edited by: Scott R ]

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I agree that the piece could use some work, but over all I like it. I get the impression that the author is male (although I wouldn't be surprised if I were wrong), and young. I'm guessing Hobbes.
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quote:
How exactly did the guy know there was a kitten in a drain pipe? This could use some explanation.

Well, that actually didn't bother me. Newborn kits make a VERY distinctive noise.

We had a couple in the basement once, and the noise (which I could not figure out WHAT it was) sounded like nothing else I've ever heard.

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Yeah, but he was in a car (presumably, DRIVING it), and the kitten was in a drain pipe.

Man's got some good ears, wot?

[Smile]

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No to everybody.
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Okay, then using the same rationale, T_Smith (I nearly guessed him the first time).
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Jeniwren?

Man, I'm running out of critiques. . .

This needs to be longer.

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No and no.
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All my thoughts have already been expressed. It's written well, but it's too short to really sink my teeth into, or to judge the writing with any accuracy. My biggest problem with it was wondering how this guy could hear a kitten while driving. The narrator addresses this (her?)self in the first sentence, but it doesn't fix it for me. As a writer, I have often tried to patch up a hole that somebody pointed out to me with a throwaway "I noticed it too, hunh" kind of line, and this is what the first line feels like to me. The writer can't explain why he heard it, but needs him to have heard it, and so the narrator says "I don't know how he heard it, but . . . " This seems amateurish to me, but only because I've been guilty of it myself and I recognize my own mistakes. But it might not be at all. If we had more, maybe we would discover that this guy has superhuman hearing and that this is setting up that bit of characterization. We don't have enough here to know whether this passage is necessary to the story because it explains how they found a kitty, or because it demonstrates his freakish hearing.

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I couldn’t hear anything but the sputter of the engine.
To me, "sputter of the engine" seems like a cliché. Engines only sputter if they are dying, first of all. Otherwise, it should be a hum or something. But they always seem to sputter in stories, especially on dark and stormy nights.

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He reached his hand into the pipe that ran under the road and pulled out what looked to me in the car like the soggy remains of a cornbread muffin. Until it moved.
I like the use of the fragment. Dramatic.

He reashed his hand, or his arm?

There is a good bit of characterization through action here, as we learn not only about this guy's freakish hearing, but about what kind of person he is--the kind who rescues kittens from drainage ditches.

Of course, that seems like a cliché "white hat" trait as well. Is he a volunteer fireman too? This makes me think that the author is youngish.

I would have gone with T_Smith, but even if it's right, I'm not sure if I would get any points for it, now that somebody has already guessed it. So . . . hmm . . . I don't know why, but I'm leaing toward guy trying to write what a girl thinks an ideal guy is. There's no reason why it couldn't be a girl instead, but this is what my gut is saying. I'm tempted to say Jon Boy, but I would expect a wider variety of sentece structures from him. I'm tempted to say Geoff, though I have never seen his writing, but I'm thinking the son of an author might have a bit more polish. So . . . um . . . how about Pixie, and forget this whole "it's a boy" thing.

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Say, Dana, if we give a critique and a rationale, we don't get points for both?

(I think I asked this before, but I don't remember if you answered.)

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Hmm. My thought was that anyone who gave a critique was basing their guess on the critique -- hence two points; one for the critique and one for the rationale implied by the critique. I’m not sure what to do with a critique and then a separate rationale. I shall ponder.

Not Pixie.

[ November 13, 2003, 11:54 AM: Message edited by: dkw ]

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And if you post multiple guesses w/ rationales, do you only gain points after the first if it's right?

And will scores go down to zero in the new "season"?

(This is where you tell me to chill out, it's only a game, and the scores don't mean anything. But you don't know me and games! [Smile] )

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This game is like Whose Line Is It Anyway? in that everything’s made up and the points don’t matter.

I tend to think that in the scenario you’ve described you would only get the points for the correct guess. But in reviewing precedent, I find that in round nineteen I only allowed one guess at a time, which seems like a good way to eliminate the problem.

The scores will definitely start over in the new season, that’s part of the reason I didn’t just add the new submissions to the pool and keep going.

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*giggle* Too bad we didn't play any board games while we were in Florida. That could've been interesting [Razz]
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That means I have one last chance to make major scorage. . .

How does the narrator feel about this person that is getting out of the car for no apparent reason? How does the narrator feel about cats? Is it the man's car, or the narrator? Is the narrator a man, or a woman?

All questions I wish I had answers to. But I do not, because this entry is too frickin' short.

Really, this is a good, simple extract. Very strong, very concise. I just wish it were longer so I could enjoy it more, and critique it more, and find out what happens to the cuddly widdle kitty. . .

dkw

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quote:
Man's got some good ears, wot?

quote:
this guy has superhuman hearing
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we learn not only about this guy's freakish hearing, but about what kind of person he is--the kind who rescues kittens from drainage ditches.

O_o

I didn't expect to see Lois & Clark fanfic on THIS board . . .

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He reached his hand, or his arm?

I agree with Ic -- this is unclear. Maybe just "He reached into the pipe"?

Is it IndexCard?

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we learn not only about this guy's freakish hearing, but about what kind of person he is--the kind who rescues kittens from drainage ditches.
No, we don't. He could've been hungry.

We just don't know.

And that makes me bitter.

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Hey, Icarus [Wave] I had already guessed pixie. For suggesting that I am no one, I will blatantly steal your guess of Geoff.

Rational: Because Icky is a big meanie.

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Only one guess per game?

Sorry Celia . . . I am blind.

OK. My instincts were saying boy, but I just can't see any of the unnamed boys on the list having written it. So I'm thinking girls, by process of elimination.

(FWIW)

(Unless the whole story is dark satire, and this piece is horribly out of context. Wouldn't that be a hoot!)

I'm thinking it's one of the following: ludosti, Leonide, JaneX, Dragon, muppet, rivka, pooka, and Christy. Christy and rivka are on my list largely because their posts in this thread make me suspicious. And yet, part of me really wants to guess JaneX.

Hmm . . . if I can have a second guess, I'll make it rivka.

[ November 13, 2003, 02:00 PM: Message edited by: Megachirops ]

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I think dkw said only one guess at a time -- that is, until she comes and "no"s us all again.

I've managed to successfully sow suspicion again, hmm? [Big Grin] [Cool]

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The extreme squishiness of the beginning could be a great setup for something really dark. Just what is that kitten? Is it really a kitten? What will happen to the family, now that it has arrived.

I think that the piece is mostly pretty good. I do like it (despite the cute factor).

How about Papa Moose?

Edit to correct the spelling factor.

[ November 13, 2003, 03:08 PM: Message edited by: eslaine ]

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I'm going to throw out a guess of Pooka.
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*hands Sopwith a sweater*
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Process of elimination doesn't work. If we assume that every round could remove one person form our pick list, that still leaves 46 people to choose from,

and I think DKW is sneaky enough to claim this is the FInal Round, but secretly use someone's Next Generation posting just to throw us all off the track.

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Plus, there's no rule that says that each person may only be used once per round.
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Some people sent in more than one sample, in any case.
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Process of elimination does not work from round to round in the season (rounds 1 through 30), but it certainly works within each round. There is a set list of people to guess from, only one excerpt is guessed on per round, and presumably each excerpt has only one author. So as long as you keep track of who has been guessed already and who hasn't been guessed yet in each round (which a lot of people don't seem to do), you can quite easily guess by process of elimination.

I agree with everything Icarus has said so far, and in fact I seem to be thinking along the same lines as he was, as I had also considered Geoff, Jon Boy and T_Smith, and rejected them for the same reasons. I do think that it seems like a male's writing for some reason, but I can't seem to find any guys on the list that seem like a good match. I suppose I don't know all of them that well.

Well, I'll go ahead and rule out guys for now. The cornbread line makes me think of Texas, so I'll guess kat.

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No to everybody.

And yes, I meant one guess at a time, not one per round.

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The New and Improved Already Guessed List:
Locke
Maethoriell
Unmaker/David Bowles
Morbo
Pixie
Shlomo
ak
Pat
porce
Kama
Hobbes
T_Smith
jeniwren
dkw
IndexCard
Geoff
rivka
Papa Moose
pooka
kat

I guess Human.

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Hmmm... I think maybe young, maybe female.

I just read over muppet's and Ryuko's pieces and I don't think it sounds like either of those.

Dragon?

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No and no.
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It's so sweet and poignant. It has to be Celia60!
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[Laugh] Elaine

Rereading the excerpt, I wonder why we hear the engine at all after he has stopped the car. Why would he leave it idling?

Is it JaneX?

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Ding ding ding! [Smile]

eslaine got it.

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[Eek!]

Really? Wow, celia, I liked it, but I hadn't even come close to guessing you!

So, what's the story, does the guy have super hearing of some sort?

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