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Who wants to critque the whole thing?

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If the goblins decide not to eat you right then,
They'll take you away to Grim-Glommery Fen.
The fen is a swamp, and an old secret spot
Where Wild Landers go to sell treasures they've caught.
And it won't take a moment, you'll see it is true--
Today, the greatest of all treasures is you.
Ogres and wort-hags, specters and ghouls
All vie to buy you with potions or jewels.
A wrinkled old troll chief offers half of his lair
For a bite of your ear, and the rest of your hair.
A dragon roars out from way in the back,
"Nine chests full of gold, and a Bottomless Sack!
A year's worth of mud-slugs I'll throw in for free!
Bring them both to my kitchens, I eat dinner at three!"
The sound of their haggling is something to hear
They laugh and guffaw, and they snarl and sneer.
This is no place for children (I've already said)
So to make sure your neck stays with your head
Sneak quickly and quietly beneath all the noise
Past troll legs, and drool-wights, and giantish boys.
They're too busy betting on just who will win
To notice their treasures stealing away from the Fen.

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