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I very kinda bad for doing this, but it's been a while since I posted this and I think I've improved it quite a bit (due in no small part to the suggestions made here), and would like someone to take a look at the first chapter for me. See if I'm FINALLY on the right path. We're looking at 2,821 words.
I remain you loyal and humble servant, JOHN.
quote:Ginger’s head throbbed in rhythm with Def Leppard’s “Pour some Sugar on Me” which was emanating from every corner of Baby Dolls Gentlemen’s Club. She cringed, knowing the song would stay with her the rest of the night. She watched the loud, bass-filled music shake the cheap, wood panel walls of the dressing room; her headache worsened. “I wanna go home,” she sighed to herself, massaging her forehead, which did nothing to alleviate her headache.
Taking off her clothes, Ginger stared at the reflection of her naked body. She had never spent so much time in the mirror before she had started stripping. Now, it seemed where ever she went her likeness was looking back at her. It was unnerving.
Always comfortable with her appearance, she was concerned about how self-conscious she had become, as things like going to the gym and watching her diet, never major concerns, were constantly in her thoughts. She was able to maintain a trim, toned build while still maintaining her femininity or at least she hoped so. Her shoulders weren’t the least bit broad, her stomach was flat but not rippled with muscle, and she wasn’t so skinny her ribcage was visible. I can’t look that bad, she thought. It’s not like I’m hurting for tips. “Have I grown self-conscious or shallow?” she snorted, unsure if she knew the difference anymore.
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