The man sitting chained before me, oh how I pity him. Coming from the business world, he probably thinks dog eat dog only applies to ruthless competition. Well, here in the Lycanthropic Underground, dog eat dog is literal. One wrong word from him and I will slowly shred him to pieces.

"Look, all I wanted to know was if the rumors are true. I didn't want in this deep. Now you hold me captive and all I can think about is blood. I want out. Please! Let me out!"

The yellowish glow coming from his eyes is a satisfying signal. Yes, this one will be good. The best tasting flesh is that of a werewolf in the process of transforming for the first time. You get the best of both worlds, the tenderness of human flesh with the smoky-sweet taste of werewolf flesh.

(edit to tell how werewolf meat tastes.)

I can't think of anything else to comment on, so it looks, at least to me, like this one's pretty smooth and good to go. Keep up the good work.

However, the dialogue is just an info dump.

The craft is a little clunky.
Since this is in the first person, you don't need phrases like "I looked."

This sentence is weak:

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One wrong word by him and he will be shredded to pieces.

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