“Save the child first.” Bronwyn Wynstelle whispered to the midwives trying to save her life. They bustled around the royal birthing bed in aprons stained with blood.
“The child is all but gone, my Queen.” Anna said as she patted Bronwyns brow with a wet rag.
“The child.” The Queen commanded, “This child will be a war avoided. My child must be a girl. She has to...” Thunderous pressure robbed her of breath and an ability to continue.
Bronwyn reached inside for magic to silence the pain. Her eyes lit up as the magic filled her. The midwives all stood back in fear as their Queen’s eyes lit the walls of the birthing chamber. A woman with magic is cursed. The midwives will not touch Bronwyn now that she had shown her magic. Not while she liv

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“Save the child first.” Bronwyn Wynstelle whispered to the midwives trying to save her life. They bustled around the royal birthing bed in aprons stained with blood.
“The child is all but gone, my Queen.” Anna said[,] as she patted Bronwyn[']s brow with a wet rag.
“The child.” The Queen commanded, “This child will be a war avoided. My child must be a girl. She has to...” Thunderous pressure robbed her of breath and [an<--? Do you mean "the"?] ability to continue.
Bronwyn reached inside for magic to [silence<--? Do you mean "ease"?] the pain. Her eyes lit up as the magic filled her. The midwives all stood back in fear as their Queen’s [I suggest adding a modifier to solidify the image, like: blazing] eyes lit the walls of the birthing chamber. A woman with magic [is<--[violates tense, unless it's a thought--which needs to be made clear.] cursed. The midwives [will<--[Again, tense issue: would] not touch Bronwyn now that she had shown her magic. Not while she liv

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It's much clearer what's going on. There are some tense issues, and a couple of punctuation marks missing, but they are easily fixed.

Like I said, this is much clearer than your last attempt. Good job.

I hope this helps.