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Phanto
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So I've learned that my school has these labs with really cool music editing software.

When I then learned that some of the more advanced stuff was actually what was used on some of Lady Gaga's hits, I couldn't help but try my hand at making a song myself.

Voila - would appreciate any feedback or thoughts! =)

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I have only one thing to say, because you're probably not really looking for in depth criticisms right now.

The first 8 or so seconds of a piece of music establish the tone and or pallet you intend to use throughout. That can mean either a slow burn which gets the listener used to a subtly transforming landscape, or a quick establishment of a some level of energy, and a beat and melodic or harmonic area that will be employed.

What you have here in the first 3 seconds is an elephant carrying a giant spoon trundling onto the stage and falling on his face. The establishment of the rhythm, and harmonic and melodic material is a big mess. You'll notice sometimes pop songs *do* this intentionally, only to wipe that out by injecting a higher energy, and more organized second introduction directly following the "false" introduction.

What you have here is... not attractive.

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Pallet = a wooden platform
Palate = a set of preferences, esp. tastes
Palette = a range of available colors, or a variety of methods available to an artist

You wanted the third one, which is often pronounced "pah-LEHT" instead of "PAL-it."

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What attracts you to the end product Phanto? I'd like to hear what went into it before I say what I got out.
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Jenny Gardener
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I turned it off rather quickly. Mind you, I do that with a LOT of pop music. Not enough complexity, not enough compelling reason to keep listening, not enough intrigue and poetry in the lyrics. (this is why I tune out many pop songs) And it didn't make me want to dance. (the reason I'll keep an otherwise annoying pop song going) Not being fluent in the language of music criticism, I can't speak to specific elements of the composition. I can only tell you the effect it had on me.
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Armoth
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How did you auto-tune this?
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quote:
Originally posted by Phanto:
So I've learned that my school has these labs with really cool music editing software.

When I then learned that some of the more advanced stuff was actually what was used on some of Lady Gaga's hits, I couldn't help but try my hand at making a song myself.

Voila - would appreciate any feedback or thoughts! =)

I think it lacks structure and tunefulness. Study and practice are essential for most art.
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El JT de Spang
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I think it's an abomination unto music. That said, I'd classify the first songs I ever wrote the same way.

In other words, if it's something you enjoy, stick with it.

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Why do I have to hear a song this incredibly bad mock other people's music? By comparison to Bieber's music being 'swine flu,' this entire wretched composition is explosive ebolic necrosis.

Actually, let's combine the two to make something even better.

http://tinyurl.com/2e6x672

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quote:
Originally posted by El JT de Spang:
I think it's an abomination unto music. That said, I'd classify the first songs I ever wrote the same way.

In other words, if it's something you enjoy, stick with it.

Truer words have never been spoken. I will never forget the truly humbling experience I had in South Carolina.

I went to an open mic at a place called Cafe Underground. There was this old guy there who was trying to learn song writing. He was terrible-- easily the worst musician I had ever seen on a stage, anywhere. His guitar playing consisted of strumming fairly unsteady quarter notes on a poorly tuned guitar. He sang (no exaggeration) like a deaf Elmer Fudd with a cold and his lyrics were about second grade level writing. I recall thinking to myself "someone needs to tell that guy he can't do it and put him out of his-- and our-- misery."

I continued to show up on occasion and a few months later, saw the same guy.

He was playing a basic finger picking pattern. His lyrics were about junior high level and, while he still sounded like Elmer Fudd with a cold, he was now on pitch. I was blown away. He was now as good as some of the other open mic people and, while it was certainly no masterpiece, it was actually pleasing to listen to. I have never been so proud of a total stranger.

It was a great lesson, and I'm very glad I got to learn it.

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I had to go through the same exact thing with my writing, once upon a time. You always suck to an inconceivable extent before you can be any good. So, yeah, stick with it and then burn all copies of this song.
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