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SiliGurl
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I'm looking for someone who might be willing to review a fantasy short story of 10k words. Unfortunately, with my deployment looming up, any responses would be needed before the 8th. If interested, please LMK and I'll email the document to you.

Here's a sample:

Barefoot, Elanna stumbled across the wet cobblestone street and felt the damp chill seep through her entire body. Rain trickled down the sides of the dark buildings lining the alley and fanned out like greedy fingers to snatch at the garbage and filth sequestered within the alley’s deeper recesses. Purplish-bruised thunderclouds obscured the sun, letting only a muted grey light to guide her steps. The only sound was her own footsteps slapping against the street and the pattering of rain around her. There were no customary cries of seagulls and no vendor catcalls pushing overpriced goods-- nothing to reveal where she was or why she wore a thin shift barely covering her nakedness from whatever prying eyes lurked out of sight.

Thanks,
Sili


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JBSkaggs
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I'll give it a look.

jbskaggs@hotmail.com


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GZ
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I would be willing to take a look.
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NewsBys
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I've got time if you need another reader.
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dpatridge
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i would've loved to take a look, unfortunately, my motherboard on my desktop fried, and it's too uncomfortable to read something that long on a laptop. if time were not so urgent i would have said that after i get my desktop back i'd read... oh well.

anyways. i like the story so far, from what i can get of it right now. been a long time since i read a pirate story


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MaryRobinette
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Send it over. I've got the week off.
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