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First off let me say I am usualy straight forward and makes me seem harsh, but I do not mean to be that way.
If this is the begining of the story, somewhere in the limits of what you can post there should be somekind of action OR get the reader introduced to the main character.
I like the discription of the lands but you shouldn't start with it. You can put the discription later OR work bits and peices into the story as it progresses.
Someone once told me when you write a story it should be like standing with a picture touching your nose. As the story goes on it would be like slowly stepping back giving you more and more of the picture.
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The right button is "post reply" and the left button is "post new topic" so you clicked on the left button instead of the right button.
If you want to say which topic you were trying to reply to, I can quote your post there. (I don't think this software allows me to move the post to the correct topic. At least, I haven't figured out how to get it to do that.)
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