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mikemunsil
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I think that I have finally found the voice I was looking for in this piece, but I would appreciate a few more comments before I submit. Would someone here mind reviewing a short prose piece, fantastical, but not fantasy?

a few lines follow
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the trees; They rise
by Mike Munsil

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what do you see,
when you look that way?

the trees

just trees?

those trees
look at them; they rise

is it time?

no
look at them, look at the trees

they’re only trees

no
look at them; they rise

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Jeraliey
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I don't know how useful a second critique would be, but I would like to see it again if you wouldn't mind. It really spoke to me the first time.
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Keeley
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Same here. I have some time tomorrow for flash fic. Send it over.
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mikemunsil
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Thanks! On the way.
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MaryRobinette
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Hi mike, send it over. Although, I recall last time that I found it evocative, but didn't have anything helpful to say.
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Shi Magadan
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Hi, I'd like to take a look, please send it over.
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mikemunsil
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on the way

thanks again Mad Puppeteeres!

welcome to Hatrack Shi

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wbriggs
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Send it to me, too! I can handle poetry, although I'm not a poet.
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JennyMac
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I would love to read the rest if you don't mind.
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mikemunsil
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on the way
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