1)
So I sit Sarah down after class and I tell her, "I'm concerned about you. I'm concerned about your safety." I make a show of sighing reluctantly and I turn away. I don't want to tell her any of this, my body language says. But circumstances have forced my hand. "The rumor among some of the students,"I tell her, "Is that D.C. brought a knife to school today. A knife," I say,"that she intends to use."

2)
So I grab the first kid I see and take him into the first floor boy’s room.

“Stand right here,” I say. “Don’t move.” I point to a spot on the tiled floor. He stands there, next to a row of urinals, looking horrified. The urinals are the tall kind that go all the way to the floor. He radiates a kind of confusion and a feeling of being very, very nervous.

It isn’t enough.
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Together they clock in at about 2500 words.

I'm confused by your question, though; they already almost seem to be from the same story. I suppose I'd have to read them before the question would make sense.

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Great job. Have you published/submitted either?