Ok, so this story doesn't have chapters but there are points where the story moves along a bit and things change up so it seems like it could be the beginning of a chapter. This is one of those spots. I'm going to post the first 13 lines of it. The reason I'm doing so is because I'm wondering if it jumps too much from idea to idea between the two paragraphs. Let me know. Thanks.---------------------------------------------
There was a legion stationed outside the village now, closer to ringing it in a blockade than anything else. Or so Naironi put it at least. Every time she had to pass through their checkpoints on her way to pick up supplies from the countryside she felt nervous. These men had dark strains to them. She could see ruthless tendencies in their eyes and wondered how they could be here to protect them and not to conquer. Who checked their authority, she had to ask. If they chose to rape and pillage would anyone stop them?
There were pirates now. They raided everywhere up and down the coast, but they had hit the village twice now in succession so the King sent troops in case they tried for a third time in a row. There had never been pirates before, not in her lifetime or that of her parents and grandparents. This was something new and entirely unexpected and the village had been caught by surprise each time. No one knew just where the brigands had come from, just that they were here now and posed a danger.
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