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I have written something but I feel it's not the best I can do. I feel I can do much better considering that's why I'm here. I'm not going to post the first 13 lines as I want people to read the whole thing and then give me their feedback which I don't want anyone to hold back on.
If you think it sucks then say what stands out the most, if you think it's good but can be better please tell me how I can make it better.
If anyones interested in reading my story please leave your email here and I'll check back in a day or two to see who has left their email and then send it to everyone.
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Part of the reason for posting the first 13 here is to act as a hook; to tempt people into wanting to read more. Without that hook - and without any information as to either genre or length - you're asking a lot in terms of commitment from other people.
I'm afraid I can't take you up on the offer. But good luck.
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Hey Leigh, Like tchernabyelo said, except to add: There are people looking for others to join their writing/critique groups (Smaug comes to mind). You may find them in the Open Discussion forum. If not you could always post a request yourself and get one going. It is a good way to have whole pieces read and critiqued so long as you are willing to do it for others.
Edit: to spell tchernabyelo correctly. Got to figure a mnemonic for that one.
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Hey, Leigh. I'm afraid tchernabyelo is right. You're going to be hard pressed to find help if you don't at least post a few lines here. Just leap, you may be surprised at how much it can help you to get the first two paragraphs tightened up. You'll learn a lot, and it will help you with the rest of the piece.
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i should have really put in the genre and length i guess. i forgot all about that. i'm sorry! the genre, well i guess its a fantasy set in modern day world, life Earth and cities and stuff, a normal life. the length of the part I wanted people to read is about 1500 words.
I am a sucker for contemporary fantasy. Will almost always bite and I want to read other Aussie writers. If you do decide to post first 13, I can guarantee you that least one reader for 1500 words.
(I can do short reads at lunchtime during work, but am not good for longer ones at home... you know, life and stuff get in the way there. )
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