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is any one interested in reading my first few chapters. It's a fantasy type deal. Just lemme know and ill email it to you. I just want to know what people think of the premise of the story and its potential. its in the rough stages. no need for grammatical feedback. i just want to know what peeps think about the story.

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Here's MY critique:

1) You start this request out with a lower case "I". This error is repeated throughout your paragraph. You need to capitalize the first word of each sentence.

2) The word "lemme" isn't a word, not unless you are using it as slang in dialog.

3) Unless you aren't feeling well, "ill" should have a capital letter and an apostrophe, so it reads: "I'll."

4) If you are asking for a critique, grammatical feedback comes with the turf. A credible critique will make note of technical errors in your writing, including spelling, punctuation, and grammar. A good writer will not waste our time with a poorly constructed draft.

5) The "peeps" think that maybe you should hold off offering your writing for critique until you clean up the mechanical errors.

You have to realize that critiques take an enormous amount of time. I literally spent the entire day yesterday on a single critique. And this story was extremely well written, without much in the way of mechanical errors. (A good read, too, Silver3.)

The "peeps" have no interest in devoting time to your writing if you have devoted no time in making it the best draft you can. Lack of knowledge is one thing. We can help you with that. Laziness is another. Don't offer it for critique until you've cleaned it up.

Based on the lazy writing style in your paragraph above, this "peep" would decline your kind invitation to look your rough draft over. I would have to say that until the mechanics are in better shape, it has no potential.

Now, before taking offense or being hurt, keep in mind mechanics are relatively easy to correct. Utilize your sixth-grade English and simply take the time to clean it up. THEN ask us to critique for potential. I'll bet you would have a great deal of potential at that point.

On a side note: we seem to be getting an influx of kids in the forum again. Using the word "peeps" is a give-away. If you are not 18, it's OK to read, but please don't ask us for critique.

Thanks.