As i said, this is a very short story, if you'd like me to email it to you or send you a link to it let me know, i'd be very happy to get your input.

Untitled Short Story:

Clapping hands shower the performers standing on top of the

stage and they bowed and bowed and bowed and bowed. They wave and run

behind the curtain hanging behind them. Seconds after they

disappear behind the curtain they run out back onto the stage

and jump off into the crowd in a frenzy. Out from behind the

curtain comes running after them a little rabbit. This is the

rabbit that the magician has used ever since anyone could

remember. Everyone who had worked for this certain magician had

learned or been taught to fear this rabbit. Most didn't know

why they were supposed to fear it but the way the others told

them to never touch it or look it in the eye instilled the sort

of fear that most people will not test.

Stevilo was the sort of man to question this fear. He'd been...

Tell the story from you character's viewpoint. I don't care about the band and the rabbit is not unique enough to hook me. I want to read it all from his viewpoint.

How about the magician? They can be mysterious or strange or scary, bring him out on stage running from the rabbit or proclaiming doom or something.

Have everyone else start screaming and running off and your POV just waits and is not intimidated at all or something.