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mikemunsil
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Member # 2109

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Here's an interesting excercise:

http://www.everywriter.com/words.htm

Write a one-sentence lead into a novel based upon your reaction to the photo on the website.

Posts: 2710 | Registered: Jul 2004 |

djvdakota
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Member # 2002

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OK. I went, I saw, I was totally uninspired by the current photo. Could it be all that snow <Gag> and cold *gasp* and wintry exercise [groan]?

Maybe next time.

Or maybe someone could come up with a better picture?

Posts: 1672 | Registered: Apr 2004 |

Keeley
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I entered it, but I sympathize with you Dakota. I stared at that picture for a good ten minutes before something clicked.

Oh, and thank you, Mike for sharing the link. It was fun figuring out a first line.

[This message has been edited by Keeley (edited November 24, 2004).]

Posts: 836 | Registered: Jul 2004 |

mikemunsil
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Member # 2109

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This one was hard, wasn't it? Took me a while and some creative grammar to get one sentence that would have a chance of placing. I hope that the grammar lesson I learned here concerning semi-colons is correct, and that the folks at Every Writer agree that it is one sentence.

You tell me yours and I'll tell you mine.

Posts: 2710 | Registered: Jul 2004 |

djvdakota
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Member # 2002

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All right. I did it anyway. It's probably as boring as the picture.

quote:
Alex groaned, thinking about how nice it would be to slip back into the hot tub with Roxanne, while the salesman droned on and clicked through yet another picture of a perfect skiier on a perfect slope on a perfect day in the perfect time-share condo deal.

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mikemunsil
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quote:
It was hard, so hard to take the shot; she was so perfect in every way, a young man's dream against a brilliant blue sky.

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hoptoad
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quote:

[This message has been edited by hoptoad (edited November 29, 2004).]

Posts: 1683 | Registered: Aug 2004 |

Keeley
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Member # 2088

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*takes a deep breath* Okay, but ... rrrgh, I'll just post it.

quote:
"Trish taught me skiing wasn't the only thing that could break your legs."

Posts: 836 | Registered: Jul 2004 |

Robyn_Hood
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quote:
Angela hated everything that reminded her about the accident; she hated that picture the most.

Posts: 1473 | Registered: Jul 2004 |

wetwilly
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Member # 1818

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There's something about careening uncontrollably down a mountainside on two skinny finberglass twigs; it screams in your face that you're breathing.

Posts: 1528 | Registered: Dec 2003 |

Minister
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Member # 2213

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Can I post it here even if I didn't enter it there? Here it is:

The two things that kept Trish intact on the slopes were the things that kept her alive on her job: balance and control.

Posts: 491 | Registered: Oct 2004 |

mikemunsil
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Member # 2109

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I love the creativity here!

I think EveryWriter must have searched diligently to find the most uninspiring picture they could.

Posts: 2710 | Registered: Jul 2004 |

GavinLoftin
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Member # 1966

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Here's mine:

Brigadine had been told it was her last day to live, so she wore pink, the color her mother was buried in, and went to the slopes to ski.

Posts: 25 | Registered: Mar 2004 |

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