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wbriggs
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Dialect is Southern. A phonetic spelling would be

I aynt gawn do that

The "n" on gawn is more a nasalization.

So: how would you spell this?

I've had enough critiquers object to

"I ain't gone do that"

that I can no longer ignore their complaints.

I looked through Huck Finn, and found that he was often "going to" do things. I couldn't find this in Harper Lee, or O'Connor. I see "gonna" in other dialects.

What would you do?


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I aint gonna do that - that's what I would do.

But are you really sure you need a dialect? In general I find unless you can do it really well- don't do it at all (at least in the final copy)

Maybe get a few of your southern friends (if you have any) to sound like what you need and have them stage a conversation (even southerners who don't normally have an accesnt can upon need give one - you can trust me on that one ) And write it down- give them the proper English dialogue and see what they say- that's what I'd do.


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MaryRobinette
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A couple of questions.

Is it your POV character that's speaking or is your POV character hearing a Southerner?

Which part of the South, since there are a wide variety of dialects?

Personally, I'd stick with "I ain't going to do that," because that's the way I hear it when I'm back home in Tennessee. I can't hear the dialect when I'm actually there and my folks are talking. And, even when I do, it never sounds like "gawn" to me.


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I agree with MaryRobinette. Using word selection to infer a dialect is usually much easier on a reader than trying phonetic spellings. If your reader is not familiar with the dialect it could get horribly confusing. "I ain't gonna do that" is probably okay because "gonna" is common enough people recognize it.

Reading is more about pattern recognition than mentally sounding out letters. You've probably seen examples of things like:

Kpeenig olny the fsrit and lsat ltretes of a wrod in the rhgit palce is euognh to cnvoey the wrod.

I find having to mentally sound out stuff and then match it to a word while reading a story very distracting.

If you decide to do it it's probably best to stick to common ones readers will recognize and not have to try and sound out.(gonna, 'tis, c'mon, y'all etc.)


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wbriggs
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The POV characters and the speakers are Southerners. (So am I, for that matter.) The region is Appalachia, and I'm not Appalachian (I'm from southern Georgia), and now that I think of it, I don't know that Appalachian people say "gone do that" -- I was just using my own accent. Maybe Appalachian people say something else. Mary, is your family from east TN?

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MaryRobinette
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My family is from Chattanooga, but I grew up in the piedmont of North Carolina, so although I've been exposed to the Appalachian accent, I don't know it cold. If I said anything, then I might say that your rhythm seems a little off. It always seems like I run into a lot of stuff that's almost like echololia. Someone might say, "I ain't going to go do that."

Oh! I know. There's a great book of Jack Tales that has the Appalachian dialect written down, with standard spelling, but it really gets the rhythms right. Darn...I can't remember who compiled it.

Anyway, my two cents would be to stick with standard spelling if everyone is from the same region. I don't think anyone would hear a word and imagine it spelled wrong, you know?


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I'm not a native, but I spent 9 years in East Tennessee.

I ain't gonna do that

I ain't fixing to do that

I'm not fixing to do that

are all plausible. Older people are more likely to use "fixing"

the "fixing" is often pronounced "a-fixin'"


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Ahhh...dialects....my least favorite part of fiction: both reading and writing.

It's my least favorite part to read because it's difficult to read sentences written in dialect. Not only do I hae trouble visualizing how they're pronouncing the words, but also what words they're saying.

It's difficult as a writer because not everyone speaks the same way and sometimes I have to find some way to get that across in my writing.

I'm not gonna do that.

Well, it's easy to read. I at least understand the words, which is more than I can say for, "I'm not gone to dhat." That looks like a simple writing error. "I'm not gawn do that." makes me stop over the word "gawn", say it or think it out loud, and then translate it into English I can understand before moving on.

The trouble with "gonna" is that most people don't prounounce "going to" so formally. If I stop and think about what I say (St. Louis born and raised...midwestern accent) it comes out more like goin ta. Only in formal speech to people pronounce all the letters of these words. In fact, the 'g' on the end of most -ing words gets dropped in most speech.

Now, actually putting gonna in your writing may infer a more drastic speech pattern than "normal" since we are all used to hearing it going to even if we say goin ta or gonna. But it does it dishonestly, and unevenly. What will a southerner think of their own accent written down, for example? And Mary brought up a great point about how a southerner would hear another southerner.

I suggest relying more havily on word choice to bring in the southern accent. They have quaint turns of phrase like fixing to. I might also throw an "ain't" in there for "am not"

Phonetic spellings really can go horribly wrong: they can sound differently to the reader than they did to the writer, bring across the wrong accent, or just get in the way of the story for little actual gain in terms of "realism." You want me to picture a southern accent? Set this story in the south and make it seem very southern, from the weather to the southern pride. Then choose your words carefully, but spell them right in the end.


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What about:

"I ain't goin' to do that."

?


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I live in the South, and I normally say -"I'm not gonna do that." - This is because the word "ain't" was beaten out of me at an early age.

It you want to get really freaky, how bout, "Ain't gonna do that."


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MaryRobinette
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I wasn't going to bring up the use of "ain't" because I figured that it was an education level indicator, which is how I hear it.
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Another native Southerner chiming in. I've lived for extensive amounts of time on either side of Tennessee (totally different dialects), and also in the Piedmont area of NC (sheesh, MaryRobinette! We need to compare notes!)

I agree with the other southerners. What's said is "going to," but what others hear is "gonna."

The use of "ain't" does imply education level. But it also implies rural. I too had "ain't" beaten out of me at an early age.

However, I commonly use "I'm not gonna do that" and have never had anyone ask what I was talking about. "Fixing to" is another matter. Its usage is perfectly acceptable (and widespread) in the South, but outside the South, it gets the occasional raised eyebrow. So unless I'm really angry, (or wish to be severely underestimated on a first meeting), I've mostly exorcised "fixing to" from my vocabulary.

But I never say "ain't."

So, Will, the question still stands: What area of the South? Rural or urban? And what time period?

Those last two are important, because as time passes and populations become more mobile, you start to see a softening of dialect, most noticibly in the cities. I have family in both rural and urban south and the differences in dialect in the general population are becoming more pronounced.

Lisa

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MaryRobinette
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Hm...Lisa, so whereabouts in N.C. did you live? I grew up in Raleigh, N.C. I feel like I should just start tossing out my life story to see if we were seperated at birth.

Oh. I don't know how ya'll is used in Southern Georgia, but up where I'm from it is purely for plural usage. I think in other parts of the South it sometimes used for plural and singular.


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I always understood ya'll to mean you all.
I used to say it, but now I've changed to you guys. I think because I worked with a number of people from "up North". They usually said yous, or yous guys.

I find that I speak very formally at work, church, out in public view. But when I'm home, or with family, I speak more Southern.

I have said:
Look at that there.
Come on ya'll.
How bout you.
Look at them dogs run.
That there's a big tick.
I reckon.
You folks have a seat.
Jack done gone and got himself arrested.
(I'm kidding about the last one, but I've heard it before)

I still can't bring myself to say ain't. Guess my conditioning was too strong.



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I like a phrase my cousin uses...

"You're not killin' snakes." (means calm down a little!)


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I always admired Katherine Kerr's ability to convey dialect in her dialog without having it be intrusive. It's more of a Scottish/medieval setting, but she handles the dialect well. I'm referring to her fantasy series about the land of Devvery, the first book is called "Daggerspell."

Her website is: http://www.deverry.com/
She has excerpts from upcoming works posted to give you something to examine as regards to her style.

In relating it to depicting southern drawl, I would say her technique is more in how she phrases the words and the cadence of the speech, rather than depicting dropped consonants and such.


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MaryRobinette
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Actual expressions I have heard people use:

"It's raining harder than a camel pissing on a flat rock in the middle of the dessert."

"Colder than a witch's titty in a brass bra in a snow storm."

"She's going to birth a whole herd of cows if you don't get home right now."

"We're just beating our bicuspids with idle chitchat."

"Last time I saw him, he was knee-high to a grasshopper."


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One of my favourite stand-up CD's is Jeff Foxworthy's "Games REdnecks Play".

On it he has a list of a few southern words that I find hillarious. Here are three gooduns .

Usedtocould:
-Can you dance?
-Well I usedtocould. Give me a minute and I mightcould again.

An'em
-How's your momma an'em?

Sintuwus:
-Told my old lady, "Sintuwus up, get me a beer!"


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Huh! We say "usedtocould" here in Utah.

quote:
I don't know how ya'll is used in Southern Georgia, but up where I'm from it is purely for plural usage. I think in other parts of the South it sometimes used for plural and singular.

When we lived in Texas, I heard people use y'all's (possessive) as well.

Since we've lived in Texas, by the way, I feel that I have earned the right to use y'all for second person plural, and I do. I grew up using "you guys" and didn't like it as much because it's masculinish (I can remember my daughters protesting once when I used it because "we're not guys!")


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Re-read the thread and found my points weren't helpful at all.

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I've never heard ya'll used as singular, except by non-southerners. It's a dead giveaway. This includes film and print.

Of course I never spent much time in the super-deep non-Appalachia south - southern Georgia or Albama, or South Carolina. So I could be wrong.

Newsbys, an excellent list. I've said many of them myself, and I reckon I still do regularly say a couple.

And MaryRobinette, I lived for a few years in Greensboro. Nice place.

Lisa


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In some areas, y'all is used as a polite 2nd person singular pronoun. In those areas, "all y'all" is generally the plural 2nd person pronoun. I know that seems strange, but it just recapitulates the historical development of "you", which used to just be the plural of "thou". Plural 2nd person pronouns have a way of becoming polite singulars. It's happened in a lot of languages.

-K.


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Well, a big thank-you to all y'all. I'm going to use "going to" and I ain't gone use "gone." (If Mark Twain does it, it must be right!)
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