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JohnColgrove
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I wasn't sure where to place this, sorry if it's in the wrong one, but would anyone by willing to read what I have to Journey to the Lost Universe? It's two chapters long with a total of about 2,300 words. Basically I just want to know if I corrected that whole showing vs Telling problem. I think I did, but I'm not quite sure.
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Hello John,

I need to get some practice at this whole critting thing so I'd be happy to take a look at the first two chapters for you.


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K, it's sent.
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I would be happy to read it too. I have been editing my own stuff for the same thing and could use the practice if you want another reader.
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I'm a bit busy and I may not be a good judge of Show--I like narrative stories and I'm having my own problems with figuring out Show- but maybe if you posted the first 13 lines it could give people an idea of what you have.

Of course if you don't mind it taking a while and my problem maybe we could do a trade.

I have a novel that needs a check over. "Storm Born" down below.


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