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I don't know if anyone would be interested in this exercise? The exercise is a semi-follow on from HSO's recent task.
WHAT YOU DO: Describe the way a person enters a room. EASY?...There is a twist. You have to describe / depict a certain atmosphere / emotion as well. E.g. Starting sentence: Sam walked into the room.
Becomes ANGER Sam slammed his way into the room.
The trick is to create atmosphere in one sentence, or two if you really must. I have found that this task helps focus me on the words I am using - I am finding the right words instead of a great many words. It also means that I start using the thesaurus to find new and interesting ways of describing common-place things. This may be too simple for you. But it is challenging when you get going.
The first emotions / atmospheres would be
FRUSTRATION JOY DESPAIR SATISFACTION FEAR
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She bounced into the room, her cheeks pink and radiant, her arms swinging at her sides.
Hmm. Pretty cheesy. Maybe...
He dropped his backpack just inside the door, cut a straight path to the chair, and dropped himself into it, looking more like a cat after the dogs had had their way with him than a boy coming home from school.
Not bad. Next...
The matron shoved him through the door and slammed it behind him, leaving him to stand before the board of governors with nothing to hold between he and they but his hat. This he twisted in his hands as if trying to wring courage from it.
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Joe sulked into the room, and not seeing his beloved cat, grabbed his pistol on the top shelf of the closet, pointed it at his head, and pulled the trigger.
SATISFACTION
Joe beamed as he crossed the threshold of the house that cat built.
FEAR
Eyes darting, Joe toed into the kitchen hoping the cat wasn't hiding on top of the fridge, ready to pounce on Joe's head and gouge his eyes out.
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Nice just laughing and laughing (with you not at you)
Satisfaction - Sam sauntered into the room, a small smile on his face.
Sam oozed into the room and melted onto the couch.
Fear - Sam shakily entered the room and locked the door behind him.
FRUSTRATION - Sam had tried a billion times to open the bloody door, finally he gave up and kicked the door in.
JOY - Sam danced into the room, the only member of his own personal party.
DESPAIR - Sam slumped against the door, entering the room was pointless.
Thanks guys you're great. p.s. found a fabulous word = hellhag. It's so interesting the negative words referencing women. Thought someone might be interested, make a nice story.
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Oh yummy words That is a very excellent website look what I found Carnaptious A blatherskite A fizgig A doddypoll I shall give half my kingdom and etcs to the person who can tell me what a blatherskite is. Or use it really well in a sentence. That is SUCH a GOOD word. Can't you just see it in a story. "The old man leaned out the window, shaking his fist he cried, 'damn you, you blatherskite! You'll never get away with this!' Oh words fail me! 6 new words in one day - lovely li
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Frustration - Sam shouldered his way through the door, shoving more patient moviegoers aside as he forced his way into the lobby.
Joy - Sam sailed through the door as if in a dream, clutching the winning lottery ticket in his hand.
Despair - Sam shuffled into the room, his heart heavy with the knowledge that she was gone forever.
Satisfaction - Sam strode back into the waiting room, his confident smile beaming out at the other job-seekers huddled there.
Fear - With bated breath and trembling hands, Sam turned the knob and eased the door opened. A rivulet of sweat trickled down his back and his mouth was pasty-dry as he crept through the portal into the House of Horror. (OK, two sentences, best I could do.)
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Frustration-Sam slammed his whole body against the door, trying to get it to open, but to no avail.
Despair-Having tried to open the door unsuccessfuly, Sam leaned against the door and let out a deep sigh.
Satisfaction-Sam waltzed through the door, knowing that he had fixed that door on his own.
Fear-Sam touched the doorknob tentatively, but could not bring himself to turn it. Finally, he turned the knob and crept into the room as silently as possible.
Joy-Sam burst through the door singing show tunes at the top of his lungs.
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