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Infernal
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"So you ready for that drink," he asked, pulling his sword free of the last of the bodies.
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The boy scowled. “Name’s not Fred. I’m Tiger. Tiger Holmes, like in Warland.” The latest VR game for the eight and younger set. “I’m tough!”
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InarticulateBabbler
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"I can do a hell of a lot more than cook, bandage," at which point she yanked the cloth bandage's knot tight, "and bang some filthy prospector."
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Aww, only one? Oh well, let's see what I can do.

She looked at me incredulously as I went on in a low voice, "Even though he's hurt the ones I care about most so much, I cannot kill a helpless man."


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Noele
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"This won’t solve itself, Mom!"

My most current WIP. A little cliche, maybe.


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Maybe it was how his eyes suggested that all the easy smiles and warm banter were nothing more than skilled playacting, and that his personality was simply a costume.
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Ok, here goes:

"Her face had grown wrinkled and her hair dull, but Mable’s eyes still sparked with the fire and determination of a ten-time world poker champion."


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Staring at the trail of her bloody heelprints on the carpet, she thought, I won't cry; I can clean this before he sees what I've done.
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"I'm innocent!" shouted Jamil, but the sound traveled no further than the soundproofed walls of the the dimly lit interrogation room.
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Will scrunched up against the jetty, his knees protecting his face, and, after removing removing a quarter and placing it flat against his hirsute inner arm, he tied off and went about his dark ritual, finishing with a cigarette he lit beneath his shirt to protect the tiny flame from the screaming Atlantic wind.

I must admit this was done at work and I was a bit distracted. Let me see if I can redeem myself with something a bit more compact.

Having quaffed his drink and smoothed his black tie and matching cummerbund, he strolled up behind the leggy blond leaning out over the balcony to firmly squeeze a handful of one of her copious flanks through her thin, black cocktail dress, and only after she spun and slapped him adroitly did he bother to introduce himself, saying "I'm sorry, ma'am, I thought you was my sister, but seeing as how as you have all your teeth and toes, I believe it is my delicious duty to ask you to dance in the hopes that I can discover who committed the egregious error of leaving you alone at my party without having first introduced us."


Here's another attempt to cram a character into the corridors of one sentence.

After surveying with cold blue eyes each of the black-masked snipers carefully training the infrared laser scopes of their military grade M249s at his chest, he opened the well worn overcoat to reveal a white tee-shirt, a grungy rag stained red and peppered over with bullet holes, and said with a smile as broad as half of Texas, "I'm going to tell you like I told my last two ex-wives: if you can find a heart, cry havoc and have at, but if not, I'm coming after your..."

[This message has been edited by waterchaser (edited July 28, 2009).]


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This looks fun Here's a couple...


"I'm doing this because no one else will save them," He whispered as he lifted his eyes to to the smokey heavens and cursed them, "Not even you."

***

"I'm not going to roll the proverbial rock into the pond just because you're afraid of a few ripples if I toss the damn thing!"

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Seeing no alternative route and with their pursuers closing in, Zantra dropped her human illusion, grabbed the prince who stood protectively in front of her and then threw herself backwards through tower window; trusting her sense of flight wasn't too dulled after all these months in disguise with the wingless ones.

***

There was something about his favorite political rival that made him shorter tempered than a bull in mating season.

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After a few hours and Nathan not having struck a single blow, Matthew finally let his sword drop from his exhausted hand and said "I'd bet everything I own that there's no one on this world nor in the five hells that could get past your shield Nathan, but one day you will face an enemy you must strike at."


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Ben Trovato
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"Undefeated willpower is NOT a virtue, Daddy," Elfriede said silently.


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Henry, whose hands bore the marks of a farmer, never wanted to be president of the United States, but it just sort of happened that way.
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Ruth knew she should focus on her technical document, but daydream characters floated through her mind, begging for new adventures.
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In darkness she silently moved between the shadows of the alley with her long cloak sweeping the ground and a sheer vail covering her eyes, twisted weapons of fate.
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The old world had spit him from its bowels and he evolved into the best killer the world had ever known.
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No one had ever seen her hair freed from the band that kept her hair in the schoolmarm bun.
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As he stirred his hot milk Harry's mind wandered, tuning out Mother's droning lecture and turning to the familiar world of adventure on the high seas, of krakens and whirlpools and noble heroes making great sacrifices.
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abozzo64
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how does one edit a post? i didn't proof before submitting.
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Kathleen Dalton Woodbury
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Right above the words in your post are a couple of icons. The one on the right is supposed to look like a pencil and paper.

If you click on that icon, you will get a page that lets you edit your post and then submit it again.


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Spencer Thurgood
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The bitter wind carried more then the winter chill, it carried an icy feeling that Richard knew only too well.
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Only the bitter cold kept the infant from screaming into the darkness of the empty room.
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He was a dark and stormy knight...
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Crane
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*snort* Dark and stormy knight. That's the funniest thing I've read this week!

All right, lets see:

His cigarette smoke made every vitriolic syllable visible, "Poison is a woman's weapon."

One more, this is fun:

He squinted into the waitress's acid glare as he loosened his tie, "That's okay, babe. I like my coffee like I like my women: bitter and murky."

[This message has been edited by Crane (edited August 02, 2011).]


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He stood straight-backed in the arena, his nondescript looks belying the sense of competence he radiated.
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He enjoyed looking good.
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Dalan had only loved one of his whores, and that bitch had left him with a daughter.
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Here's one from the query summary of my current WIP:
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Captain Kate MacClaine is decisive, resourceful and self-reliant, but despite being good-hearted she's also impatient, blunt and overbearing.

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