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Nicely done, tesknota. Is this your first challenge? You certainly cleaned up this one - very nice opening. Does it actually continue into a story, or was it just made up for the challenge?
Also, congratulations Mr. Blake - two very different openings, both well done.
And thanks, Trina, for running this. I look forward to the next challenge. Do we get to guess who wrote what?
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Feel free to guess, though it's up to the individual whether or not they want to reveal themselves.
Also, if anyone wants to know how their non-placing opening did, emial me and I'll tell you your results.
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But congratulations to pdblake and Brendan and to everyone who participated! I liked a lot of them and reading all these entries really opened my eyes to different types of openings. And of course, thanks Trina for all of your hard work. =)
Brandon--- Thanks! Yes, this is my first challenge, but I'm a pretty new member. And nah, I just made it up for this challenge.
pdblake--- I'll put my money on Dead Hand Control, #6. Am I right or what?
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Congrats to the winners! I put a bit more of a challenge on myself for this one. Basically all 3 of my entries are all from the same book series I've been toying around with for a number of years now. It wasn't until I posted them that I realized one of them was totally in first person and didn't work out for the challenge itself.
I was trying to do 3 different hooks for the same book in different ways. One was first person narrative, and the other two were different forms of third person.
Thanks for the feedback, it helped me tone some possible ideas for those openings.
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Congratulations to the winners. I'm glad that at least one of my top three choices made it into the top three.
And, as I said to Trina, the quality of all the submissions was first-rate. I had a hard time coming up with a best 3, let alone placing them into 1st, 2nd & 3rd. In the end, it all boiled down to readability for me. One reason my own may not have fared so well.
However, I got the response I expected to it; I wrote it that way deliberately for effect and got exactly what I wanted back from those who commented on it. So, thanks to those who did comment.
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Congratulations to all. I'm a slow learner, so didn't get the submission formatted . . . too long. Still had some nice feed back, so thanks to everyone for that. I was sad to have lost my hook at the end "Suddenly the lights went out, the faries disappeared, and all went silent." Was supposed to be titled: The Last Sweep. Had another, but somehow in trying to figure out the parameters of the line length I accidentally posted it, so now can't submit as it had my name on it. Going to go cry in my beer and give up on challanges. But I am slowly learning. Maybe third challenge is the charm . . .KT
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