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Right, right. I sometimes forget my goddess status when I'm frolicing with these mere mortals.
Tom? I'm just going to continue to not guess Jon Boy because I'd hate to think I said anything nice about him.
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Stranger? After all we’ve been to each other and all we’ve done for each other, you address me as stranger?
I can still feel the weight of your head in my lap as the early morning light broke through the curtains and spilled across the floor after that night we both spent crying. But I suppose that was a long time ago.
Life passes by so quickly when you’re not looking, and one morning I woke up to find myself a stranger to me. I just never thought I’d be one to you.
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Celia, you're supposed to be sending the fiction to me. If you post it under your own sn it kind of misses the point.
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Once, celia, once that was you and once that was me. What with all the choices you've made recently, all the changes you've gone through, I just don't feel like I know you anymore. I can't trust you anymore. I don't think we'll ever return to that beautiful place, so I suggest you move on with your life as I—*sob*—have moved on with mine.
Oh, and I guess ludosti.
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I think this is the best piece we've had so far this round. I love the bit about Hannah and the way her shoes barely touched the floor. I disagree with the few people who complained that the "two years ago, now?" line is confusing. I read it just fine.
Hmm... can't really think of anything I don't like about this.. besides maybe wishing there was more of it.
We're running awful low on guesses here... I'll go with Sopwith.
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Dragons are very symbolic in Chinese culture. This is about a Japanese family. SO... since the two are completely different my rational has no strength what so ever but I like dragons so dragon is my guess.
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Sarahdipidy JaneX sndrake Jon Boy Christy T_Smith Dan_raven Leonide Teshi :Locke Tresopax mackillian Troubadour Nick
I'm guessing Papa Moose because of the many semi-colons. I don't think Papa Moose usually use many semi-colons, but if I don't have a reason dkw will yet at me again. Besides, there aren't THAT many semi-colons in this piece anyway.
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I'm guessing dkw because I would try to sneek my own in at sometime if I was running this. Plus she's easy to overlook being in charge and all.
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I will sneak in a last guess before I consider myself a guess-oholic and abstain for the rest of this round.
Dante.
A major (or even Doctor?) in literature, he should be able to write something good, shouldn't he? Besides he has a foreign connection with his Italian thing, which isn't that far off from Japanese...
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I actually thought of him, but I haven't seen him around in so long that I didn't think he'd submitted anything. Doh!
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So, Dante, is there more to this? And what was the inspiration behind writing about Japanese internees?
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I submitted this excerpt a few months ago when it was hot off the presses as the first few paragraphs of the first draft of a story. Since then, I've had it workshopped, worked through a few more drafts, and put it away for a while to incubate before dusting it off and finishing it up (which I'll do soon). Consequently, it was really fun to see it here and read your comments!
saxon, your analysis of the story was dead on, and it was a relief to see that it was making sense (though the setting becomes more obvious as the story continues, of course). I'm very glad that the beginning (at least) rings true to you--I did of a lot of research to make it feel right (including a fascinating 1954 BYU linguistics master's thesis on English speech patterns of Japanese internees!).
Why the topic? Well, several reasons. I've always been interested in and disturbed by the Japanese concentration camps, and as a native Utahan I felt a certain connection to the Topaz camp (where this story takes place). So the idea has been rattling around in my mind for four or five years, waiting to coalesce. The fact that my SO is a quarter Japanese and had relatives interned (and, I believe, in the 442nd) was another bonus.
And the reason I submitted this piece to the Guess the Author Game was because I knew I could stump some people. I mean, really, how many of you would associate me with a story from the POV of a ten-year-old Japanese girl? We all know I'm much too curmudgeonly and Eurocentric for that! <grin>
Which reminds me--why did several of you feel this was a female writer? I'm not offended at all, just curious.
Thanks for your comments and reactions, everyone; it was fun!
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Somebody bumped it and then deleted their post, so as to give me a not-so-subtle hint to post the next round without making it obvious they were the one doing it.
Or maybe it wasn’t really bumped, and Bob bumped it and invented the story about it being mysteriously at the top so I’d think someone else bumped it and deleted their post.
Or perhaps there’s an even more sinister conspiracy afoot.
<---- has been reading British mystery novels.
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*laughs* Would that be a protestation of innocence? a "you can't prove nuthin'!"? or maybe just returning the look?
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