If anyone is interested, I have been editing and rewriting my little story (7 pages so far) and I am looking for readers that'll give me honest and unbiased critiques.I have gotten a few back and they helped out alot. You guys know who you are.
I look forward to getting some good feedback so I can hopefully finish this thing.
Thanks, once again.
Still looking for more readers with new perspectives. Especially those that like to write fantasy and/or epic stuff.
Here's the first 13 Lines of the new version.
Kyros threaded his was through the forest at dawn, just as he’s done for most of his life. He was following a path to his favorite hunting grounds.
The forest was waking up; birds began to sing, chirp, and whistle. Insects began buzzing, making the air vibrate, and the larger animals started to search for food. He swatted at a few persistent flies, hoping birds would come and eat them. The sounds of the forest assured Kyros that he came at the most opportune time.
Snapping limbs, deep throated snorts, and crunching leaf litter brought him back from taking in the cool, crisp, humid air of the morning and the feeling of solitude within the forest.
Ten deer came out from their bedding area and into view, the largest stag taking up a defensive posture in front of the herd. The rest of the herd began grazing after searching the area for threats. The stag searched again with its keen senses. It snorted as if it chased away every threat in the area. It began grazing with its herd.
Kyros slipped behind a large tree and looked at the stag. That was too close, he almost saw me.
He slowly took his bow off his shoulder and got in his ready stance
-BHJr-
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