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Use solid POV, and dispense with this artistic detachment stuff. I know I already suggested that, and you were reticent. But it remains my answer. I told you that the detached narrator would get you in this trouble.
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My first impression was a desire to hear more. I think/hope she makes it since she is the character that I sympathize with. The Salem witch trials were a true and horrible historical truth. Just like "The Village", there is a creepy, underlying truth that must come out. It would grab me when opening to the first page. I do read forwards. Laurie
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