It was a grey day in November. Old leaves that littered the sidewalk jumped at every slight breeze. They played in the street like foolish children, until speeding cars crushed them into dust.
It was evening, and even the lights from the houses seemed cold. This bleak light spilled from windows onto the brown stubble of grass. A few grave crows poked around in the leaves, looking for supper in the dead ground.
A girl trotted through the collected leaves on the sidewalk. Under one arm, she clutched a black binder. Her other hand held her windbreaker shut. She had to get that zipper fixed.
As she passed the entrance to Ashwood cemetery, she stopped. She’d like to stroll through. Of course, she’d been in here,

[This message has been edited by Darth Petra (edited September 19, 2008).]

Secondly, you switch POV when you introduce the girl. "She had to get that zipper fixed" is from her POV, but she wouldn't think of herself as "A girl" as she was introduced in the previous sentence. You can solve the problem by using a name instead.

Good introduction. The girl's desire to stroll through the cemetery and the creepy atmosphere are enough of a hook for me.