This is not the title I'm going to use for this piece, but it does fit for identification purposes.I've put this up before for a crit. I also asked for readers and received none because of the length. It's 10,500 words. Since it's been awhile since I've had this up the last time, I'm looking for a crit and a reader. If any of you don't have the time to read it all, that's fine. I'd be thrilled to send all or part of it. Just let me know.
So here's the first 13 lines, and I hope I don't hear any groans from the ones who have seen this before:
Wyatt strolled down the barn aisle to inspect the sale horses he would soon be leading through the auction. He stopped to examine a black leopard mare in the nearest holding pen when she chose that moment to capture his gaze with her own. Deep in her eyes an image from the past leapt out at him and caused his arms to tighten with goose bumps.
“Black Rain,” he whispered.
The bumps eased away but not the memories. Not with his spirit guide staring him right in the face. He still remembered how Mom had insisted that he and Silas go on separate vision quests to alleviate two young boys’ boredom on a hot summer day. The dream that followed helped him make that first initial contact with his spirit guide, Black Rain.
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