Hi all - this one's fantasy/fairy-tale with a twist. It's at 6300 words and I'd love comments on the first 13 and/or offers to read the whole thing. Fair warning: it's probably PG because there's some discussion of the princess' conception, but nothing graphic I promise.revised version:
His Royal Highness was not having the adventure he had always dreamed about.
Prince Aeric had thought it would be so easy - after all, wasn't it always easy in the stories? The dashing prince only had to get on his horse, ride to where the fair maiden lay waiting for him, win his way past her guardians through strength of arms or wit, and claim his prize. Simple. Only the tales didn't mention being saddle-sore. Or it raining constantly and half his escort catching sick. Or being lost in the woods. And when he finally broke down and asked for directions...
"She's in there, somewhere," the peasant said, gesturing at the massive ruin before them. "Good luck finding her."
"Wait! In there where?" Somehow, Aeric hadn't
first version:
His Royal Highness, the Crown Prince Aeric Jakove of Castenia, was not having the adventure he had always dreamed about.
He had thought it would be so easy - after all, wasn't it always easy in the stories? The dashing prince only had to get on his horse, ride to where the fair maiden lay waiting for him, win his way past her guardians through strength of arms or wit, and claim his prize. Simple. Only the tales didn't mention being saddle-sore. Or it raining constantly and half his escort catching sick. Or being lost in the woods. And when he had finally broken down and asked for directions...
"She's in there, somewhere," the peasant said, gesturing at the massive ruin before them. "Good luck finding her."
"Wait! In there where?" Somehow, Aeric hadn't
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