Hi Brant,I enjoyed the vivid imagery :)
I found serial killer/shaman unwieldy, but I'm guessing this is intentional.
I had to look up simoom, but that's probably just me - I fail at crosswords :)
I was unsure if golden eyes blazed was meant to be taken literally (they really are on fire), or if it was figurative (they're just a bright gold colour)
The order of then settled back into itself. then as he unveiled his face to be disconcerting, seeming as if I'd finished up with the action of unveiling his face only to go back to it.
and glanced down at Urizen. seemed too trivial given his blazing golden eyes, it felt more like 'glare' fitted the scene for me.
I also had an issue with visualising the scale of the spider's lair vs otherwise ostensibly human-sized characters.
I can't answer whether I'm hooked or not because it's not a genre I'd normally read anyway, however I couldn't see a significant motivation to keep reading apart from an explanation of why someone would be pasting a wall with gore (and as I say, it's not enough of a question for me to personally keep going).