This is my first time trying a story in the first person, and started with something of a challenge. I'm looking for crits of the first 2873 words. I'm actually unsure as to whether or not this should be an intro scene to a book, the beginning of a short story, or a serial. It's fun, though.
Blackout is an urban fantasy story, rated PG-13 for violence and minor league swearing.
quote: I snapped out of it that night with a pain in my jaw. Someone had punched me in the face. Again? Really? Usually I donít come to until itís all over. The man underneath me was clawing and scraping, desperately reaching forÖ oh ****, a gun? So much for trying to stop. My hands were bloody already. I hit him hard in the back of the head. It was oddly exhilarating. Like I said, I usually donít wake up till after. Despite my history, violence is kind of a new thing for me. Blood splattered out beneath him. Something snapped. He screamed. Why? Why canít I just go out to a movie like a normal person? A normal person who goes right the hell home after heís done. I hit him againóhe was still moving. Iíd like to be merciful, but chances were that he didnít have much left anyway and I doubt if