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What is the tense of the whole narrative? 3rd person can be present or past tense, or future tense, I suppose.
Anyway, since the first sentence is past tense ('He had'), I assume the rest of the story is as well. In that case, the bottom example feels right to me.
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Hmm, I wonder if a style manual has the answer? I actually prefer the first example, and have seen that done in print. But it may be okay both ways.
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I prefer the 1st. Not to be contrary, but because you've set up that the character is going to opine onthe basic truths, and then the character does so and the presetn lends immediacy. It seems more correct to me that way.
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It's my Greek training coming through again, but I like the first -- not because it's deep penetration, but because it states general truths. Good question, though; I often struggle with exactly how to word thoughts in 3rd person deep penetration.
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Well, the question is what you mean to say, not which is "correct". By using the past as you do in the second example, you strongly imply that these rules of the universe (or perhaps just one of them) are no longer valid. The implied statement is very clear, and it is not present in the present tense usage.
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The story is part of a timeline. Even though the story is told in past tense, there are events that happended prior to the story, at the same time as the story and events that will happen in the future.
He'd always known the basic rules of the universe. The Klingons had loved Plato at one time. Now they love Shakespeare. They would have loved OSC if the series had not ended.
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I'm with Survivor on this one. I would use the first, for example, in a situation where you want your character to be confused about the present reality of his situation:
"He'd always known the basic rules of the universe. Klingons love Shakespeare. 2 plus 2 is 4. And even-numbered Star Trek movies don't suck. So why wasn't the Illudium 238 Space Demodulator working?"
As Survivor points out, the second seems more appropriate to a situation where things are different, and the character is aware of the change.
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