Anyways, part of the process is that the applicant has to write an essay explaining the "why I want to be a doctor" topic. Here is the official prompt:

"the Personal Comments essay as an opportunity to distinguish
yourself from other applicants. Some questions you may want to
consider while writing this essay are:
- Why have you selected the field of medicine?
- What motivates you to learn more about medicine?
- What do you want medical schools to know about you that
hasn't been disclosed in another section of the application?
In addition, you may wish to include information such as:
- Special hardships, challenges or obstacles that may have
influenced your educational pursuits.
- Commentary on significant fluctuations in your academic record
that are not explained elsewhere in your application."

Here's the kicker: I get 5300 characters to do this. Not words, characters. That includes spaces and punctuation. It works out to about a page and a half.

I finished my essay yesterday after a few months of working on it.

My request is this: is there anyone out there who would be willing to review it?

I don't need any expertise in health care or school admissions. Rather, I am looking for feedback from other writers I trust based on my writing alone. Does it do a good job? Is it repetitive? Grammar errors? You know, that sort of thing.

Any takers?