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Robyn_Hood
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This is from one of the first flash challenges at Liberty Hall. I'm not sure if I just want to revise it or if I want to do more with it.

Right now I'm looking for any feedback, critiques, or brainstorming ideas that anyone has time to offer.

Thanks guys

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Title: Switch!
Word Count: 501
Genre: Sci-fi
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They say a child doesn’t start making coherent memories until after age of three or four, but that isn’t always true. At least, I don’t think it is.

For me, it seems as though I have always had memories. I remember sitting in my crib, playing with my stuffed animals; and standing in front of the oven, watching mom’s chocolate chip cookies bake. I remember learning to walk and talk -- struggling to feel coordinated. I remember...

It’s just that now, I’m not so sure those memories are mine. In fact, I’m not so sure any of my memories are mine.

[This message has been edited by Robyn_Hood (edited September 19, 2005).]


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wbriggs
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I'll read.

BTW, if you also post this at Liberty Hall under PSC Robyn Hood, it'll be even easier than email.


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Robyn_Hood
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Thanks, Will. Actually, I already have it posted in my PSC forum. I can PM it to you or you can comment in the topic if you prefer.
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Miriel
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I'll read it too.
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I'd like to read the whole story, too.
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Sounds interesting. I'll read it if you send it my way.

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It's a fast starter, strong conflict right out of the gate and escalating to a hook very quickly.
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Robyn_Hood
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Thanks for the feedback.

Everyone who has offered to read should have it now.


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I don't have time to read it myself, but I just wanted to say I can't spot anything to crit in the opener. Really good stuff, and a sweet last line.
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If you need another reader, you can send it my way -- wolf_dude64@yahoo.com
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Thanks, Dude, I'll send it over.
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