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rippatton
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This is a flash fantasy piece of just under 800 words.


_Remember, remember when you were born._

When Ti-ti was born the Aunties came to anoint her with their declarative magic.

"Oh, her fingers are so short, she won't ever play the piano, that's for sure," said Auntie Rosalyn, who was a piano teacher.

"And look at that widow's peak," said Auntie May, touching her own, "she'll bury at least one husband, I'm afraid."

Auntie Angela said, "With a wrinkled forehead like that, this one is a thinker. Poor thing doesn't realize yet that she's only a girl."

And Auntie Penelope, trying to be a bit more positive, said, "Look at that face, how it lights up like the moon. This

[This message has been edited by Kathleen Dalton Woodbury (edited October 14, 2008).]


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monstewer
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Errr...not a lot to say apart from I like it. I'll read the whole thing if you like and try to come up with something more useful then
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Like the way this is going, though I think you could have a less repetitive structure for it. Want to send the whole my way?
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